Looks very good for a newcomer, a few issues I have:
Uke's role looks really really boring, waiting around in a room for 1000+ for Tori to come downstairs doesn't sound very exciting.
The parkour bit looks a bit bland, people love having options to choose from and having a different experience every time they play the mod
Coloring and the enviorment looks boring, grey on grey isn't optimal, especially with the mod being so square and lacking interesting angles. It feels a lot like running through an empty concrete basement.
The biggest problem is the file attached won't work in multiplayer. I see you have uploaded the mod to the website correctly, but you actually have to wait a few minutes for the website to accept your mod after uploading, then download it again and overwrite your old file(I can see this because the mod attached to this thread has capital letters in its name, uploading it to the website correctly replaces these with small letters)
So replace the mod attached to this thread with
this one and you should be good to go
Nicely done, but it needs more detail and effort. Don't worry if you busted your ass of to create this, the more acustomed you get to the modmaker the faster you will be able to create quality mods.