hi
these day i have a lot of inspiration so befores it goes i'll draw a lot
here my first try at manga style draw
C&C plz

it looks ok but omfg tou arm wtf have you done to it? it is horrible also the legs are a lil to big but taht arm ruins it

it looks good for a character but uhm legs are long and muscal arms wtf?
also it does not look like manga to me

emm <_< i know its a bit ugly but it's a first try at this so can't be really good
u see <_< >_>

If those were supposed to be wrinkles, you should make them a little less frequent and shade a bit.
Also, the hair turns transparent towards the end of the huge strand of hair.