Im making a rap, Its here >Rapperz diss.txt< Please Can i have your feed back

Terrible. Also, why did you upload it as an attachment? It would be way simpler to just copy and paste it into here. It's not like it's long.
Raps in text form are pretty meh as well. They range from terrible to alright as songs, but as poetry, raps are horrible.
Also, learn to capitalize, holy shit.

It's meh, but I doubt you typed all that

Umm it is myn.. 1. I have it saved in my folder. 2. I used notepad 3. Why wouldnt u think its myn Fist fury I did type all that ... its not that hard.

Those words struck me the most. (all being so true, mind you)

As for Nickone, all I can say is it needs a little impovement. I don't mean to be mean but really that was disgusting. One of the lines that made me laugh the most (really whole thing made me laugh) was the part that went "fly away eat some hay." Hah, it still makes me chuckle.

Thankz I guess. i just come up wiv random shit. Lol

COME ON!

^lol

anyway, its not that good... in text.
get someone to rap it outloud, theres where the real judging begins.

I personally think that any rap - yes *any* rap - doesn't sound as good when it's written. In fact, most song lyrics don't sound very good as written text because unlike poetry, which has set rhythms depending on its genre, song lyrics go to the song's beat and we can't really know what that beat is just by reading it.

My god, that was horrid.
I closed it after 2 lines.

And what War_hero said, learn to punctuate.