I like the intro Fleshy,but its kind of long, maybe have it be 5-10 seconds. Just a friendly suggestion.
Ok so I have a short story, and I mean short.
So one day I was eating lunch, just talking to people normally and then this weird kid comes out of no where and puts his hand on my shoulder. I turn around and its one of my "friends" from my 6th grade bus. He stares into my eyes and says.....,"want some noodles" and walks away.
Best story...not.