Old friends meet again- the everything was ok
but the movements were boring and twitchy.
discipline v1- This was pretty cool
opener was slow and twitchy :/
transition to the first kick was too slow for my taste but the punch was nice and powerful
what your did with the double pec and the skeet was cool for me but the way you threw it into the air was pointless, it was way too high to be a kick and you didnt do a skeet
the jump you did to the decap didnt not have much flow at all
Potram - a new beggining 2- The opener was waay generic
the grab decap wasnt that hot to me, It looks better to me if you maybe would have grabbed the head and attacked the legs
split was fine but I didnt like the transition to the pec/shoulder dm , and I didnt like how you didnt at least go for another pec/shoulder dm to make it have a purpose
Im guessing you were going for a dm with that first skeet becuase you moved uke(try to move uke as little as possible)
the second skeet was incredible, Loved it so much
transition to the pose was really twitchy and the pose itself could use work



No, your dms, and transitions could use some work. But everything else was really cool. You had some good ideas going on and I liked that. Keep going at it potram

Rainbows- the opener was fine But the transition to the split was really stiff
the decap was ok but the replay was really generic as a whole
Manipulations are so baby- I've never liked commenting on a manipulation So I'll just give an overall. You were twitchy in this replay, making it seem like you were pretty unsure of where you wanted to put your arms and legs. it was also really slow and messy for a manipulation that wasnt made in anything over -30. It also would have been great if there would have been a final boom at the end :c
Broken Bones- Opener was overused and akward
but the transition afterwards was pretty cool
you were stiff all the way through this in your upper body but the boom was cool nonetheless
pose was kinda bad


No, Your stiff in your upper body making it seem as though you really only focus on the lower body. Your dms can be ok at times but you need to work on them. Remember to work on stiffness, dms, and messyness at times

in irc today
[13:26] <Noob> He's good
[13:26] <Noob> Close to the bar
[13:26] <Noob> But not there yet
your replays are really nice, you have a good sense of style and your dms are sexy
but your just not there yet
denied