"It occurs to me,
That on this day,
I kiss you softly,
And smile sweetly, // Requires 1 less syllables and replace the word smile. **

I will take you by your hand,
And lead you far away from here,
Pack nothing but your smile,
And we can fly away together,

Through cloud or sky,
Through rain or snow,
We shall find a place,
that we may rest;
Our home,
Our hearts,
Our heaven.

We must call it our eternity;
carry it with you always."

[** Add word 'lovely' / 'lovingly'?]


So like... its my gf's birthday in a month or so and am starting to prepare.
The thing with the carrying eternity is that her present has the words "eternity" engraved onto it.

tbh this is just a place to keep it so i can access and modify it until its needed.
kthnx.